Your overall policy is to develop something called media
literacy which involves educating young people. In your other essay, the first
paragraph, you do talk about the problem and that it can be solved. However, I
might would take out the parts about the counterargument or state it a
different way. Someone might actually think it is impossible to do since you
yourself think there are holes in it. Maybe you can talk about it being a class
kids can take in school? The first amendment is a barrier so maybe you could
say that media literacy wouldn’t go against it to elaborate a little more? In
the second paragraph where you say “possibly” and then continue talking about
other classes, I think would benefit from a transition. At the end of that
paragraph I thought you did a really good job at transitioning to the next
paragraph though!
Typically, the media would not care who watches. I think
they also believe that their audience does not include children. I never
watched the news when I was younger. The paragraph at the end of page two that
goes into page three might need a little more elaboration. The last few
sentences also do not make much sense. You could benefit from rereading this
paragraph and trying to explain and reword the information a little better.
I think a skeptic would doubt the policy because of the way
you say it has holes. I agree that teaching awareness is hard to do and hard to
force on to people, but maybe you could say that that does not matter. We
should at least try to get children to be aware so maybe you could put those
thoughts in. A skeptic could point out that negative consequences could be how
much it would cost to get the public to have this knowledge or the amount of
time. The way you would gain this information about the media is to start
children off at a young age which would make people think: well what about the
generation that is already grown up? They might would also bring up the fact
that the violence from the stories could end up on the internet. That being
said, I do not think that a counterproposal is available. Media violence is
obviously going to be around so just teaching people to be more aware is
probably the only way to solve the problem.
